My National Matriculation Test experience Today is June 11th, the end of the boring training Class in school. My holiday finally comes. After the National Matriculation Test, I know I am very tired. On the first day, the Chinese exam didn't include many special things. But the mathematics exam was so bad. I think I got half of them right, and that was because I am good at math! But I can't get a really high score in math. Every day, I stand infront of the mirror, saying to myself "you will win", although deep inside my heart I clearly knew that I could't. On the next day, I completed the comprehensive science exam pretty well. As for the English exam, I knew it should be very easy, although I didn't have time to finish it- my English is really poor. I knew other students may get a high score in English, but I can’t. On the last day, it was the history exam, which I did very bad. I know I lost in this National Matriculation Test. When the teacher collected my papers, my tears flew out in my eyes. Getting back to the classroom, I knew I couldn't win the high school’s consolation prize. It's for the best students. May be I late many days, or may others. When I came back home, I told my parents that I did bad in the exams. They said it doesn't matter. But I couldn't control myself. I cried. I didn't gain much in the high school. But I clearly knew that I've gained many friends. And I know many things which are things in life. I will win。 1. 高考的准确翻译是National Matriculation Test2. 问题不太严重的表达方式我没有改，只改了单词拼写及用法错误、语法错误、基本的短语搭配、介词的用法、现在分词与过去分词用法和实在太别扭的表达方式。如果要全篇改表达方式的话，等于我重新帮你写一份。。。3. 讲“第一天”的那一段，全部要用过去时。除了every day那里。4. 讲“第二天”的那一段，也全部要用过去时。那个elements exam我实在不知道你要说什么，只能根据中国高考现状给你改成comprehensive science exam理科综合考试。。。如果你要说的是化学考试，那就是chemistry exam, 物理physics exam, *politics exam,地理geography exam...5. 你写的那个consolation prize直译为精神安慰奖。。。可我实在不知道这是个什么奖，就没给你改。如果是给好学生的奖那不能叫精神安慰奖阿。6. “May be I late many days, or may others.”这句话我实在实在不知道你要说什么。。。也没给你改。7. I can’t drove myself我也不知道你要说啥，我先给改成了“我无法控制住自己”。8. And I know many things which are things in life.这句话。。。你要说什么？“我知道很多东西是生活中的东西”。。。你到底要说什么= =？
先回下记下了，晚上九点帮你看，如果急的话，就算了。
My College Entrance Examination Experience Today is June 11th. The end of the boring school training class. My holiday has started. I was exhausted by the College Entrance Examination.改bored为boring, 令人烦恼的, 可以说I'm bored. The training class is boring; training class of school改成school training class; My holiday is really begin. 语法错误, 改成 My holiday has started; In the College Entrance Examination, I know I am very tired.这两句修改如上 The first day, the Chinese examination hasn't some especially things. But the mathematics examination is so bad. I think I lose half. It is because I am good at math .But I can't get a high mark by math. Every day, I said "you will win "to myself through the mirror. But I know I can't in my deep inside.我就给你全段修改吧On the first day, there was nothing special for the Chinese exam. But I did very poorly in the Maths exam. I think I got about half of the questions wrong. Actually, I'm good maths, and that's my strength. But I'm afraid this time I will not score high in it. Every day, I say to myself in front of the mirror, "You can win." But I am still not confident deep inside. The second day, I do the elements examination very prosperous. And the English examination I know it is very easy, but I haven’t time to do it, my English is very bad. I know other students can get a high mark by English, but I can’t.修改如下: On the second day, I did very well with the Chemistry exam. And I know the English exam was very easy for me, but I di dnot have the time to finish it. I feel very bad abour my performance in the English exam. I know others will get a higher score in English, but I’m afraid I did not this time. The last day, My historical examination, I do it very bad. I know I lost this College Entrance Examination. When the teacher collected my papers, my tears flow out in my eyes.修改如下: On the last day, I did very poorly in my history exam. I can tell that I lost the opportunity to go to college this year. When the teacher came to collect my papers, tears rolled out of my eyers. Back to the classroom .I can’t gain the high school’s consolation prize. It is the best graates. May be I late many days, or may others.修改如下: Now, going back to school, even the high school consolation prize could not comfort me. But I did not get that prize for best graates. It could be that I have been late for school too many times, or maybe it was some other reasons. When I came back home, I told I lost in this College Entrance Examination to my parents. They said haven’t matter. But I can’t drove myself. I am cried.修改如下: When I came back home, I told my parents that I messed up in the exams. They comforted me not to worry about it. But I just could not cheer up. I shut myself up in my room and cried. I can’t gain some thing in the high school. But clearly know I gain many friends. And I know many things which are things in life. I will win.修改如下: I did not gain anything in high school. But I know for sure that I have made many good friends. And I learned a lot of things that are important in life. So, now I am confident that I will be a winner of my life.后面的直接重新修改的整段cheer up, you will have just a successful life if you hold your head high and never give up on your life
你这essay要改的地方实在太多，太费时间了。如今天是6月11日，在英语里就不能说Today is June 11，而要说It is June 11 today.用Today开始只能说星期几，比如Today is Sunday。The end……不成句，没有谓语。begin是动词，is又是动词，一句出现两个动词，所以is没有必要。恕我不能一一指出了。
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